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When I was but a kid
I could dream of a future
bright and fair and happy
for everyone
who wanted to it to be.
I wanted to follow those dreams
and be one who brought forth change
to a world that so longed for it.
"You can't do that", they said,
shaking their heads and waving their hands.
"You're just a disobedient little kid
with a simple mind from a simple family.
A working man for a father and a housewife for a mother
what could you possibly achieve?"
They told me to stand down and that was what I did.

When I was a youth
I would still dream of a future
a little brighter than the present
of things I could do that at least some people
would come to remember some day.
I wanted to act upon those dreams
for it was better to try and fail than
not having tried at all.
"You won't get anywhere", they said,
snickering and laughing behind my back.
"You don't have the kind of money to get
the education you need, and neither does your family.
You should just do what your forefathers did
and be content with what's meant for you."
They told me to accept the way things were and that was what I did.

When I grew up to be a man
I dared dreaming of a future
- on occasion at least, when I could afford
a little break from reality -
that wasn't as sad as the past or the present.
I would cling to the hope of seeing better days,
for what I wanted was nothing more
than finding my place in this world.
"It's useless", they said,
"just like you are" was what they were thinking.
"You should just stop trying to change things
as they have always been this way.
You have no right to be happy,
as it is a birthright for few and can not be earned."
They told me to stop dreaming and that was what I did.
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tommyboywood Feb 2, 2014  Professional Writer
The dreams of men are but fleeting... the dreams based on Scripture are real and solid (See Revelation 21:3-5)
Small-Jessamine Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
I have no words. It is so sad :( I don't know why but I can relate to some parts of it... I guess... 
It's really beautifully done and as someone already said here, the repetition at the end makes it even more powerful. Really amazing and touching :heart:
(I used to write sad poems too but, they were soo bad. I only liked my last one, I think it's the best one I've ever written, and lately I'd kinda want to write some again... but it feels like I no longer have it "in myself". Like it all stopped... But I could post here the translation of my last poem and also I wrote one in french - the one that made me win an achievement at school :) )
OliverBPhotography Jan 14, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you. It really means a lot to me that you like it. :hug:

Yes, it's sad - but it's also the truth many people are facing every day, and for me it is - or was - as well. I was overwhelmed by old feelings and memories due to something I saw on TV the night before I wrote this, and it just had to get out. I'd like to think that it helped a little.

As for your poems, have you thought about posting them? Or writing new ones? I would absolutely *love* to read them!
Besides, sometimes, poetry works wonders as a form of therapy. :)
Small-Jessamine Jan 16, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
It usually helped a little for me to get it out of myself. Put in on paper, in verses or not, just to let it out. I wrote so many, but, as I said, only one of them could be posted here. I decided I'll try to translate it and try to make rhymes and verses as it was in the original, but, well, it'll be tough. And I might also post the french one. And maybe, I'll try to start to write some in english. Probably in free verse for the first time, then I might try to really rhyme it. It's kinda getting to me now, I was thinking about it the whole day. We'll see :)
OliverBPhotography Jan 17, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Hey, that's great to hear. :) I'm looking forward to your poetry, then!

And it's absolutely fine to go with whatever style you feel comfortable with. I used to be rather fixated on writing traditional forms of poetry, but now that I have started to write a few in free form, I'm really enjoying it. Switching back and forth between various forms is also a lot of fun for me. And, at the moment, I'm actually feeling more like writing than taking photos. Actually being inspired for the first time in I don't know how long! Let's see how long it lasts. :D

(And, as you may have seen by now, I have also uploaded two more poems after this one as of now. If you get around to reading them I'd love to hear your opinion, if you want - but don't feel obligated to post anything if you can't 'connect' to them. :))
Small-Jessamine Jan 17, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Haha well... Let's see how you'll like it ;)

Yeah, I used to do it too, but then I just stop writing. At all. I just lost every inspiration I had. And I started to write stories. But now I have this feeling that I'd love to write some, I'm just not sure if I'd have enough inspiration and fantasy to realize it. But I have an idea in my head, it came to me yesterday, so I might try to write something about it... We'll see. Not sure if this weekend cause my friend gave me a task to write a 10 pages long story -_- I've written only one story this long in my life :D so it's gonna be pretty funny... And hard. Yeah, I'm more for short stories than the long ones. Mostly because my inpiration and fantasy are really limited and I'm not able to create such a great environment to have new and new incoming ideas... Well, I need to practice.

Yes, I saw, and I really wanna read them, I just stand by the idea that you must be in a specific mood to read them, cause if you can't concentrate, it's useless. And lately, because I'm finishing my first semester, there was a lot of tests and oral exams so I was kinda busy. And today I went out with my friend to take photos (I have an old camera with a photofilm borrowed from my professor! so awesome :meow:) and I came home at 6pm and I was so tired that I felt asleep and I woke up after 3 and a half hour. School is really exhausting :X Anyway, I'll read them soon, probably on Sunday, cause tommorow I'm going to the cinema to see Wolf from Wall Street with my friends and it lasts 3 hours and before we're gonna go sit somewhere to talk a bit and then Raedwulf's streaming at 3pm EST so it's 9pm here and well... busy weekend incoming! Anyway, I don't wanna bother you with this, I just wanna let you know I haven't forgot you, don't worry! ;)
Khaimin Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's so sad.. but I really like the poem. My favorite thing about it is the repetition at the end of each stanza. Although I also really like the fact that it follows a timeline as well. It's really good, and I can kind of relate to it a bit. 
OliverBPhotography Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Yup, and I just had to get it out. ^^;

And thank you! That really means a lot to me, especially coming from you. :thanks:

The timeline and repeating structure were really important for me, but I wasn't entirely sure if it would come through. I'm glad it did. :D
Khaimin Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I understand the feeling. c:

You're welcome! It makes me happy to hear my opinion means something. :hug:

I really liked it! You did a good job on conveying your point. :)
OliverBPhotography Jan 12, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Yes, it really does. :)

Glad to hear! You know, I usually find myself struggling to decide on which things to include or not in a poem... There's just too much racing through my mind, so I usually try and see what's most important or works best in the overall scheme of things. And, as rare as it may be, I'm actually content with this one...!
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